ive writen a story and its curently semi final. but before i upload it to you all. i need some help a fresh pair of eyes.

im woried my vilian didnt work the way i intened, and that i didnt do enugh twards the end that i rushed the ending. that its not as grand and fleshed out as it ought to be need help and possible re writers i can mavy pay to help make the story over all better.