A few pieces of formatting advice:

- Your paragraphing is generally solid, but indenting them would more effectively show the breaks between them.

- As a rule, start a new paragraph whenever a new person speaks; you did this for the most part, but there are a few places you missed it and it's really important to keep conversations clear.

- While I appreciate the use of custom colors and fonts, I recommend picking a more rigid font; loops and tilted letters can be hard to read, especially for people with reading comprehension disabilities.

Overall, a fun little scene that seems to be the set-up for a bigger idea. Not bad at all.

Thanks!