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I understand the bulk of the story wants to take place when they are older, but just cutting ahead a decade after showing that the broken girl with no magic is being hounded by a dark entity, which will most likely corrupt her with the promise of magical talent, happens "off screen" is not exactly the best story telling, or worse then the next chapter is nothing but flashbacks which make the 10 year jump pointless. Showing her interaction with the entity throughout those years would have been better and organically show her decent into darkness and the effects it has on her and her relations to people around her.
A time jump of 10 years? That is interesting. Also, I must say that Kumi changed a lot from how she looked 10 years ago; now she is not only a woman but she also looks cool, and with more spiritual friends than before. I'm already more curious to know how Satomi is after that 10-year jump; amazing page, great chapter and amazing work.
Ten years pass. Might need an update on what may have developed in that span of time.
Perhaps taking a page from wildermyth?
But with an over emphasis on spell casters, you know they are set up to being bulldozed.
I know this is an odd question. Would a Kitsunes that live for centuries, treat a decade the same way we treat a singular year?
Perhaps taking a page from wildermyth?
But with an over emphasis on spell casters, you know they are set up to being bulldozed.
I know this is an odd question. Would a Kitsunes that live for centuries, treat a decade the same way we treat a singular year?
Well, I hope I can explain more properly, but for now we are where I would like to be to explain a bit more about the world
as well as have the characters be older and develop them further.
The characters in my story are meant to reflect human lifespans. But who knows maybe there are a few who surpass a typical human lifespan.
as well as have the characters be older and develop them further.
The characters in my story are meant to reflect human lifespans. But who knows maybe there are a few who surpass a typical human lifespan.
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